Monday, November 7, 2011

Is this a good story begininning? :D?

That is really good. It makes me wanna keep reading more! I love the details about her white dress whipping behind her. It made me almost see it. And it makes me wonder why she is so happy. I can tell it will be a great story. I would love to read more. But you could describe her surroundings alittle more. But its really good :)

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